A Flying Force

The monster throws back its delirious head

Eyes roll and slam shut it is said

Its whole body creaks to a tense stop

The whistling suction of breath fills it to a pop

Slimy mouth thrown wide

Arms go flailing beside

Here it comes with a AHHHH CHOOOOOOO

Head bolts forward closing in on you

Mucus catapults absolutely everywhere

The man just sneezed so please don’t stare

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4 thoughts on “A Flying Force

  1. ilkscreen says:

    Haha you got a little chuckle out of me. I like the idea.
    The rhythm feels a bit unsteady to my drummer’s ears, but I see it as a sacrifice in favor of the rhyme and story of the poem.
    Good work! (p.s. I post poems on my blog if you’re interested…)

  2. joejames93 says:

    Yeah I can see that, but the poem was mainly just for the story itself. Thanks and I’ll come have a read of your poems now 🙂

  3. Rachael says:

    I like your style! I’m a student writer as well, going to look into poetry next year. I’d love your comments when I post some myself 🙂

  4. joejames93 says:

    Thank you, I’m looking to write some more lighthearted poems but none have formed in my head yet…time and a cuppa is probably all is needed ha! That’s great we should help each other out if we’re both rather poetry novices? Yeah I’ll definitely comment, just let me know when you’ve got some poetry up 🙂

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